April 1, 2009 by watermaid
mingling with the crowd
burning incense before the temple
in Spring sunlight
a casket of dry bones
takes possession of me
Sorry it’s rather dark but it’s where the words took me.
Posted in NaPoWriMo, Poetry, readwritepoem | Tagged NaPoWriMo, Read Write Poem, word prompt | 8 Comments
Wow!!!Brilliant I add.
Your last two lines are wonderful. Welcome to the beginning of crazy April.
Quite creative . . . nice start to the month’s challenge.
THE JESTER RULES
better to go with the flow. dark isn’t a bad thing.
I love the sound of ‘casket of dry bones.’ Dark doesn’t bother me at all. Besides, one person’s ‘dark’ is another person’s flight of fancy.
Now I’ve read it back, i think it would be better in the third person.
‘a casket of dry bones
takes possession of her’
I like it, even with the darkness. Good write.
Sometimes they have to be dark for the point to be carried home. I love this one! And I LOVE the last line. It ties YOU into the poem and makes it personal.
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