This site is terrific; and what a fabulous idea of putting haiku on a blog.
This haiku seems as though it might be a bit too literal. I recall that after spending a day in Osaka, I wrote several haiku, all of which were negative. It really struck me as being a very dreary city.
Thanks William. I’m always up for constructive criticism. I wasn’t quite satisfied with it. I spent some time in Osaka. We went to osaka Castle on a Suday when all the pop groups were playing against one another.