Astonished

These are the words I’ve chosen for this month’s Cafe Writing Option Three: Pick Three: astonished, drown, time.

Drowned in his own sleep, he watches the hand of time
spin forwards until
he is an old man with arthritic hip and hunched shoulders
fighting for intakes of breath.

Drowned in his own breath, he watches the hand of time
spin backwards until
he is a laughing baby with plump cheeks
kicking his legs against his mother’s hand.

Drowned in his mother’s love, time is endless,
day stretches after day until
one day he is astonished to learn that
time is never deceived.

5 Responses to “Astonished”

  1. Cafe Writing » Blog Archive » February Particpants Says:

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  2. MissMeliss Says:

    Lovely.

  3. pieceofpie Says:

    what a beautiful response to the three words….

  4. Medhini Says:

    It’s a lovely poem really. My favourite line would be the last one ‘ Time is never deceived’. very true.

  5. catherine Says:

    This is truly awesome! I love the structure as well as the content.

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